Targets & Feedback- 03-03-10

After receiving 'constructive' critism from our teachers, Mr Ford and Mr Smith, it is evident to us the things they beleive look good and what they think doesnt.
They have advised us to shorten the story as they think it is too long and tells a whole story rather than the opening sequene. They beleive that by adding cross cutting and parrallel editing will make the opening sequence more visually pleasing.
They think, taking into consideration the story and our oringinal idea that the idea of him being beaten up is a bad idea, they thihnk to not include this will make the sequence feel more like the opening of a film.
They have also said to us that the credits need to run throughout the opening which will then again make it seem more realistic.
Other things we need to complete are;
Mood Boards- a collection of images which give an insight into the drama of our film.
25 word pitch Feedback- Feedback given from the rest for the group after our simple presentation of what our film/ opening sequence is going to be about.
Storyboards and anamatics- these need to be uploaded. we have these but need to be put onto blog.
Rough cut of film- Needs to be uploaded onto the blog to show our progress. We have tried to do this but as we have it saved in a Macintosh format it has proved difficult to upload onto a windows computer which does not support the correct programme.
Not all of the feedback was constructively negative, the teachers told us that the boys scene was well executed with good mise en scene, a great dance sequence and good use of close up shots.